Fantasy Writer

Alden
Burgess

Writing stories where the magic is easy. It's the people who are complicated.

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ExSpelled
Alden Burgess

Adult Rural Noir Fantasy

Polishing the final draft

ExSpelled

When you accidentally kill the chosen one, you're not the most popular guy in town.

Lanford Grier is very good at not having a plan. It's kept him out of trouble, mostly, ever since Merewood Institute of Wizardry expelled him for a ritual that went horribly wrong. Now he drives drunk mages home at 2 a.m. But when he stumbles upon a woman dying from a poison unseen in decades, he takes her to the only place that can save her, and the only place he swore he'd never go back.

Returning to Merewood pulls Lanford straight into a conspiracy and the disappearance of his father, the Institute's foremost expert on the Gods of Old. His sole allies are the misfits who were expelled right alongside him. They're not thrilled to see each other, but they don't have a choice, because the Hammer's years-long plan is about to pay off. For everyone else, it spells disaster.

Redemption would be nice, but he'd take survival.

Adult Rural Noir Fantasy ~95K Words Polishing the Final Draft

Comp titles: The Tainted Cup by Robert Jackson Bennett · City of Others by Jared Poon

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About Alden

Alden Burgess writes fantasy adventures filled with offbeat characters whose mouths run faster than their legs. His debut novel, ExSpelled, follows Lanford Grier, a disgraced mage who has to find his missing father and stop a shadowy figure called the Hammer.

After years of managing a mom-and-pop video store, Alden decided he wanted to make movies, not rent them. He attended Maine Media College, honing his love for great storytelling and his aversion to overly long winters. The next chapter brought him to NYC, where he spent years bouncing around the production world before turning to the page.

Alden is a board member of the Speculative Fiction Writers Association, where he writes the craft column The Engine Room. He lives in Northampton, Massachusetts, with his wife and two kids. When not writing, he's out hiking with their dog, Taco Tuesday, who balances the right amount of naughtiness with cuteness.

Alden Burgess

The Engine Room

Welcome to the Engine Room, where craft can be learned, adjusted, and repaired. Out of sight of the passengers, but essential to keep the story moving forward.

Start Late, Leave Early

Review each chapter and ask yourself how late you can start and have the scene still make sense. More often than not, it's later than you think. Readers don't need every intricate detail of the plan. They need the argument over where the plan could go wrong. The same is true for the end. Once the scene has done the work, move on. It's like a work party. You don't want to be the first one there or the last to leave.

This is especially true for stories with thriller aspects. As the novel progresses, the entry point should get later and the exit earlier. By the third act, tighten the screws by dropping the reader into the middle of the action, and then leave on that dangling question that makes them want to turn the page.

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